Reality Hits

Palinode toDreaming High

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Prelude: Dreaming High

Mum, said I, can I fly, with the birds in the sky?

Yes, you can, before sleep, flap your thoughts, take a leap...

Dreamt of wings, woke in bed, feathers dense, guilt in lead.

Mum, said I, when birds die, do they fall from the sky?

Palinode: Reality Hits

Mum, said I, as I began to ask her “why...?”
See stopped me and said, “Son,

...

Here’s your head start,
You best get on and depart,
Because I’m busy,
Doing paperwork and stuff,
And this ******* computer is playing up,
You’re about to learn some new words,
I don’t have time to answer banal questions,
Or put lines into trivial rhyme,
You got one out of me,
I’ll give you two, but not three,

Go and ask your Dad,
Out, out, out!

Shut the door.”

...

I muttered beneath my breath;
“Fine... but, I’ll make one more.”

My take on a Palinode, a poem in which the poet retracts a view or sentiment expressed in a former poem, for the prompt by dVerse.

In Reality Hits, I imagined an alternate outcome to a mother – child interaction.

Like the mother “character”, I’ve had a busy day today; and in attempting to fit a poem (or two) in, my inspiration will undoubtedly come through in the words. Thanks for reading.


Original poem by © Darius the Mate


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6 thoughts on “Reality Hits

  1. The first one fits the dream scene but the second part is where reality hits. Its a challenge to deal with the harsh realities but we make do. Thanks for joining in.

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  2. A brilliant take on the prompt! I love the dreaming in the original poem .. the depiction of innocence as we take on the world .. and later the onset of maturity .. especially; “You’re about to learn some new words.” 💝 Such a strange .. worthwhile journey we embark upon 🙂

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    1. Thank you Sanaa. Original being so dreamlike and in rhythm, I wanted the other to feel disjointed, and a bit awkward at times – like real life – or, at least that’s my excuse for the half arsed poem. Was pretty much the mother mother, trying to push out a little poem baby, whilst trying to juggle real life!

      Thank you for the comment.

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